Please make your post and comment here for this week (10/28-11/03).
The post should be a 1-paragraph revison of your in-class writing on the worksheet.
(NOTE 1. 貼文為改寫後的文章，不是課堂上你給同學的評論！)
(NOTE 2. 未出席同學請主動發信給老師，索取題目！)
Besides, you are supposed to
- rewrite the short passage with organizational errors corrected
- include at least 2 words (from the textbook) in your revision
As for this week's comment,
it should be about your classmate's post/revision.
Comment on fluency or the overall structure, rather than accuracy.
Let me know if you need help or have questions.
Wendy
Revision :
ReplyDeleteI don’t have seen the drama “LOST”, and even heard about J.J. Abrams. Through introducing J.J. Abrams and his writing type of time-bending, I am very interesting in the series. It triggers audiences’ interesting because of the complex story, and people will want to know how the story goes on. Besides, I can learn more popular words, phrases and even linqua francas from the drama, simultaneously improve my English listening and the sensitivity of foreign languages .It’s a good way to gain two advantages by a single move from watching foreign movies or any films.
Shelley 林姿瑩
“Revision”
ReplyDeleteThat “arrive in a timely manner” is the most helpful advice for me, because in the one of the details of this items which is tell us that you may set interviewers off when you arrive interviewing place more than 10 minutes early is contrast to my original opinion, the earlier we get in, the more polite we are, and the more ample time we will get to prepare and adapt ourselves to the new condition.
Owing to the taxing work, however, staffs are busier than ever and more anxious. For the reason, being too earlier is awkward and a little rude. So, I should turn up my mind moderately to beef up the competence.
To be an up-and-comer in the work place, we should consider every petty trifle and do it well such as reaching in an opportune moment, few minutes early. And then the masters will fix their eye on us!
張郡綸, Maggy.
“A comment for Shelley’s post”
ReplyDeleteThat’s really a good way to kill two birds by one stone. In addition to increasing our vocabulary, watching English movies absolutely can facilitate accelerating sensitivity of English and, on the other hand, can relax ourselves simultaneously. However, these advantages about watching movie commonly exist in many English film or series, not just “LOST”. For this reason, you can tell more detail about “LOST” to enrich the article and show your passion for it, and then we will know how interesting “LOST” is.
張郡綸, Maggy.
Revision
ReplyDeleteThe infection agents can harm us like bacteria, viruses, fungi, protozoa and parasitic worms. They can infect people sick for influenza, diarrhea, athelete's Foot and more. But not all germs are infection agents, some germs does not harm us even can help people. For example, the germs in intestines can protects us from infection agents to avoid diarrhea, the saccharomycete can produce more delicious food. So it is important for distinction, let people to know how to use them, and not be harm by them.
劉威廷 Wei
Revision:
ReplyDeleteI have seen J.J’s “lost” before, but only season one. It’s a complicated story, because the major character’s past were weave in the main story. So if I don’t see the series from beginning, I will really get lost in it. To sum up, “lost”is really good story can strike everyone’s chord, if I have enough time, I’ll watch it from beginning to end.
There is the comment for Wei 劉威廷:
I think that his writing is fluency and clear. I also like he give me many examples; let me know more about germs.
In my learning English life, I tried many ways to prove my ability, one of them is extensively reading. After all, I discovered that I can’t just scan of them. If I do not try to memorize some details, such as some points of issue or some example (like Wei did), I still can’t use what I have seen.
In short, I really appreciate what the Wei did and I’ll try to add more believable details in my article.
Yuki 張郁琦
Revision
ReplyDeleteAfter reading this article, I learned lot's of knowledge about the reasons of leaves changing colors. I found out that the leaves changing their colors due to the reduced daylight instead of the temperature. And I also realized that the different colors of the leaves are determined by the different chemicals. For example, brown leaves are the result of tannins in the leaves. At last, I knew what the best conditions for the brightest colors.
All above are really amazing me since I found out that the plants are marvelous and varied than I can imagine.
Carol 張靜茹
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ReplyDeleteREVISION
ReplyDeleteI cultivate a habit of meditation.Every morning as I get up from bed, I like to meditate for fifteen minutes.Because meditation facilitates me to do complicated things in a whole day.I can quickly clear my mind,and I can feel the peaceful tranquility.If I don't meditate , I can not finish so much taxing work and I can not feel at ease.It is a necessary routine for me.So,meditation makes me feel relaxed and it really sharps my brain.
Annie彭雅玟
comment for Carol張靜茹
ReplyDeleteShe used the time order at the beginning,and then she gave us an example.Finally,she used the term "all above" to make a conclusion.This way of writing makes me understand easily and her post strengths my impression of the article in the magazine.I know little about chemicals, so it is a little bit difficult for me to read.But I like nature very much.The different colors of the leaves attract me very much.The great Mother Nature contains lots of philosophy.People should live with it in a harmony.
Annie彭雅玟
REVISION
ReplyDeleteI will try a lot of methods to train my brain to stay sharp. Such as develope a hobby and practice writing with my non-dominant hand several minutes every day.
The method I love is learn a new language especially Japanese.It had some help in my major. When I learning Japanese I will try to talk with Japanese and try to writing something by Japanese.During these process, I should keep think continuously. Sometimes I may have some problem in Japanese and I will try to learn deeply. At the same time, my brain was keep work,it will had a great help to keep my brain sharp. So that learning new language not noly use in the day life, but also it walk my brain by making it go back and forth between practice it.
Kyo, 許育民
A comment for annie’s post
ReplyDeleteI think it is a good method to keep brain sharp. In some study refer to that as we are sleeping,our brain treat the information that we got in daylight.In my opinion meditation maybe can help the information treatment more completely and make thoughts more clearly. Thanks for your post I will try to meditation when I get up in morning.
kyo, 許育民
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ReplyDeleteI guess keep the faith will help me the most. Every time when I’m on the stage or meeting the professor, I can’t help but worry what if I said something wrong, what if I didn’t articulate well. To avoid this situation, first of all I think I need more practice and I need to practice with another person or with mirror, this can help me get used to staring by people and stay cordial, I also need to read my report out loud until I won’t bite my tongue. The most important thing of all, I really need to believe myself, holding this faith will let me calm my mind down and stay confident.
ReplyDelete許耿豪 Stanley
Revision
ReplyDeleteEnough time of sleeping will keep our brain sharp. We need energy for brain to study,memorize or think,and sleeping is a good way to keep us energetic.Our brain restructure the information we receive in the daytime when we are sleeping.By this process,brain may arrange a new space for us to use in another working day.As time goes by,if we get into the habit of enough sleeping,our brain may get sharper and sharper.
Read and write daily. I had many things everyday that the habits would be useful for me.
ReplyDeleteNot only beef up my knowledge and skill of time planning, but also train my brain to stay sharp.
Reading let me to tap into a wide knowledge and writting daily let me to reflection about the wrongs what I did.
I think that keeping the habits would let my brain to stay sharp and ward off dementia.
Jacob 林志憲
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ReplyDeleteRevision
ReplyDeleteI always meditate or eat fruits and vegetables to keep my brain to stay sharp.
We might have more pressure after we study or work all day or a long time.
We should release or shut out the stresses of everyday life.
Meditating could help me to cold down my body and mind.
I think that it is important for us, if we want to keep our brain to stay sharp.
Then eating fruits and vegetables is easy for me to take.
We eat food everyday but we must eat some kind of nutritional food to beef up our bodies.
Fruits and vegetables are easy to get in our lives.
And these have much antioxidants to mop up some of the damage caused by free radicals, one of the leading killers of brain cells.
If we want to ward off dementia, we need to start taking care of our brain earlier.
Clapton 高毓斌
Comment
ReplyDeleteAccording to Don's revision, I think it is an interesting opinion for sharping our brains and I think it is really vital for our health.
I have read a report about the importance of sleeping time for health. The expert points out that if we sleep less than 5 hours or large than 10 hours, the mortality will increase. But the report emphasize that "Too much sleep is making you tired." other than we need more time to sleep. And Don's opionin seens like emphasize that we need time to let our brains take a break, and then our brains could stay sharp.
It is a obvious contrast.In Don's post, we can see how important we need sleeping,but does the article of "enough time" refer to we need more time to sleep? Therefore, I think Don's opionin needs more attentions to articulate your concept and provide robust experiences to enrich it , like experts's studies, reports , news, even yourself experiences, let readers know how important it is and the enogh time means not only we need time to sleep but also not too much.
Shelley 林姿瑩
About Jacob's post
ReplyDeleteHis structure is clear.
First he told us what did he do and why did he do,then how did he do.
But I think that he maybe mistake the timing in second sentence.
And in the third sentence, I think that maybe he want to say "write dialy" not "write daily" and this sentence isn't fluency.
Clapton 高毓斌
According to "許耿豪 Stanley"'s post
ReplyDeleteHe first gives us a clear topic sentence to let us know what he is going to say.Then he begin to tell us his own experience to emphasize his point and tell us the difficulties he faced.after that, he let us know how he overcome these difficulties and he give us a conclution that fit with his topic sentence.With this writing tec, I can understand what he is going to say clearly.
Here is my revision :
ReplyDeleteThe fifth tip, "Keep Your Chin Up" is the most helpfyl tup for me, it thought me to be more active when oppertunty comes, or nailing the interviews, for example, being a volunteer could impress reviewers, on the contrary, afraid to being a volunteer maybe let me give off a sence of desperation. That's what I learned from the fifth tip, be confident but not too cocky, and have a courage to be a volunteer.
Stephen 王信夫
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ReplyDeleteRevision:
ReplyDeleteI think Strategy games may help me to train my brain, when I was in the game,
I had to use different ways to defeat other layers, not only it is exciting but it can let me to think more. Because I play games with people not with computer , it ‘s more unpredictable what at next time ,that isamazing.
Alex 蘇蔚鴻
My revision:
ReplyDeleteRecntly,some scientists find that there are some electorns which have a special chemical compound,which is calledbismuth telluride.In addition,one of these features is that it can travel without losing energy.And these electrons are called spintronics,which use electronic spin to carry more information than silicon-based chips can deal with.
However,it still has some problems to overcome.
One is that spintronics can only carry small currents,so it is hard to implement now.Another is that the price may be much higher than silicon,but I think it will be cheaper in the feature.
To sum up,the new discovery of spintronics will pave the way for a paradigm shift and transform computing.
Tony, 志永
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ReplyDeleteRevision:
ReplyDeleteThere are 20 tips to train our brain in Advanced magazine, and I like most in this 20 tips is "Travel".
Travel is not only an interesting activity but also a method to train our brain.
This summer, I took a trip to France. The country is totally different from Taiwan that I faced many things different to my daily routine. In France, I had to eat croissants but not steamed buns for my breakfast. In France, I had to ask for directions with body language. In France, I had to try to sleep when the sky was still light.(The sunset time was 11 pm!)
My example tells us that when we travel, we are forcing our brain to navigate a new and complex enviroment, and meanwhile, our brain will be train.
Travel can not only make our life colorful, but also keep our brain stay sharp. So, why not take a trip this weekend?.
Amy, 簡孜芸
Revision:
ReplyDeleteI have watched about "LOST" before. It's an interesting drama. You couldn't know the ending until you watch this drama to the end. Although it is a little bit complicated, I think that's still have a lot of audience in it.
By the way, I really want to share my favorite drama. It's name is "Grey's Ananomy". It's really good to see, I hope next time maybe you can see it. It's really interesting than LOST to me!
Lena楊雅迪
A comment to Alex,
ReplyDeleteI like to play that game, too. But sometimes I will give up, I don't have that much patience. I will keep on doning another thing to beef up my brain, and go away from dementia. Thanks for your sharing.
Lena楊雅迪
I think on question" Why might photography be considered a brain game?" and here is my revision:
ReplyDeletePhotography is not only about "take a picture ,"it's a infinite field waiting for us to explore. Camera industry has made a great revolution ,from traditional camera to digital camera, no matter which one we use, reading the manual is a big challenge. It takes a lot of time and efforts to know all of the functions for us ,not to mention to tap into them at different situation including considering the strength of lights、the distance of the views and so on. When learning to combine all of the capabilities of the camera, we are actually developing a robust brain.
Rita 曾思蒨
Revision:
ReplyDeleteQ;What's spintronic?
A: Spintronic takes electronic down to the quantum level. Because electrons don’t just carry charge-they also an ”up” or “down” spin, which can be read as a binary pattern, they can used to store information.
Q:What dose Yulin Chen hope to accomplish through spintronics?
A:Yulin Chen and his co-workers find a new material called bismuth telluride will replace silicon to use in new devices, transistor and spintronics devices. Because the new material have unique properties : Electron can travel in the chemical compound without resistance, losing no energy, leading a new way to carry more information. Even though the material is not yet applicable, it now pave the way for microchip development. But they believe the new material some day will be functioned and not too far.
Clair 李玥瑩
Revision:
ReplyDelete"What are you doing to keep your brain sherp ?"
Here are many specific ways to help beef up brain.
First, eatting nutrition's food. For example, rice and nooles can beef up brain.
To hear of sugar have a matter which is helpful to the head. (chhocolate)
The movie "death diary", "L" is a role in the middle, he is very wise,
and he like eatting chhocolate. But it is carefully for decayed tooth.
Second, to do many sports. For example, activity health can increase oxygen to brain.
For example commute by rode racer.
If you don't like sport, and your body maybe become worse, to go a step further,
your brain is effected.
Third, playing game can obtain rest for brain. If you think many work, maybe you feel tired.
To do the same thing continuously, you maybe feel impatient.
You can do other work, example playing game. It can relax your brain and reduce pressure.
Fourth, enough to sleep. It Should let the brain have a rest, the best one is sleeping.
Sleeping can obtain physical force, also can get spirit, it is good for brain.
Jason 翁哲盛
Revision:
ReplyDeleteTalking about the formidable Falls, Niagara falls. We think of the thunderous music the roaring water creates and the majestic scene it shows. Nigara is a really beautiful landscape for visitors to visit. But instead of standing there and just feel the falls, we should try to experience it!
There are several adventrous activities we could choose from. Maid of the Mist boat tour, Observation Tower for a bird's-eye view, Journey Behind the Falls etc. As my opinion, Maid of the Mist boat tour would be my first choice to choose. Going aboard and having a look at the waterfall in a close distance will be really exciting and stunning. Instead of the getting drenched part, I recommend the Maid of the Mist boat tour as the activtity which you must experienced.
William丘建賢
Comment to Stephen
ReplyDeleteThe structure is fine.But if you tell us that what is the tip for in the beginning like Amy did would make the passage more clearer. She told us the the 20 tips are about 'Train your brain' before she tell us more about the tip 'Travel'
And I think you should watch out for your spelling problem too.
William 丘建賢
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ReplyDeleteI think “review the interview” is very important. We can not predict what’s going to happen and don’t know what the boss will ask in the interview. We must try to memorize the details and hold these treasure experience. Everytime is the time we learn how to do better. But we don’t want to spend too much time learning it. After all, we want a job, not practice chances one by one. So we should review the interview carefully, find out the mistake we made, comprehend why the interviewer asked the question, and ask ourselves how to answer perfectly next time. After listing so many things, it comes to “practice” again. Nothing is successful without practice. We still should get well-prepared so that we can win in the competition.
ReplyDeleteTobey,莊俊宏
Revision:
ReplyDeleteI always travel to the countryside with my family. We are like to visit nature environment, and eat fresh food. The travel not only let me relief pressure, but also obtain mind peace, and improve family member's relationship, to travel frequently make me understand local custom, appreciates the regional styles, to study different culture, these unceasingly stimulate my brains stay sharp, therefore, I thought that the travel is one of promotes health, activation mental ability best methods. By Joseph
A comment to Lena:
ReplyDeleteThe Lena suggestion is very good, but in writing article structure, if can propose " Grey' s Antinomy" Attracts her reason, the attempt moves those audience that never see this movie before, then the article should be able to be more complete. In addition, has some grammar structure question in the article, lets the article read strange, my English grammar is not very good, and therefore by gets up refuels. By Joseph
Revision:
ReplyDeleteThat practice, practice, practice could help me most in the interviews.
You can avoid buzzwords and empty phrases by practice, and than you will be good of interviews for resume inside and out.
Jack 蘇仕傑
Comment:
ReplyDeleteI’m agree of Kyo’s article content, because he try a method of learning new language to raise sharp of brain, that help he to practice solution the problem and let brain keep sharp.
Jack 蘇仕傑
Revision:
ReplyDeleteI think each points for the interview are important.
Before the interview practice and realize the company are good ways to promote my expression. At the day of interview get lobby in a timely will good for every one that not disturb staffs of company.
For example I ever failed in college entrance interview. After that, to review that exam not practice well and not prepare enough knowledge. As the result I didn’t entrance that college.
If nail in interview take care the attitude in feature and if lost then I should debrief the interview.
Fareastern,廖昌毅
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ReplyDeleteI thought that has the following three spots to be possible to help my next time interview. First, must have smooth self introduction, and must be articulate it. Second, planned how to complete this work after hiring, and must display proper cordial. Third is putting on appropriate and the neat clothes.
ReplyDeleteWhen I anxious, my expression will be very serious. Therefore, I would speak not smoothly and unable to express my idea normally. Moreover, I also do not have many work experiences. Therefore I must display my zealous and wear some suitable clothes. Let the interviewer have the good impression to me.
Jeffrey 陳庭筠
About Clapton's post:
ReplyDeleteBasically, I thought that his post is fluency. He cited three examples to explain how to keep his brain to stay sharp. Finally has also made the summary. But I thought that some place connection has been imperfect in the post. However it is a good post overall.
Jeffrey 陳庭筠
Comment for six :
ReplyDeleteI agree with you, practice is important to everything ,to speak friendly with no professional word is right that we can avoid others feeling we look down on them.
Finally, a right direction is important, too ; we may get nothing because we have wrong direction.
Alex 蘇蔚鴻
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ReplyDeleteI haven't seen "LOST" before and don't know who is J.J. Albrams. But I would like to watch the "LOST" when I have time. Because the group R3's report is attraction for me. And the director J.J. Albrams is a savant that warps time. I love Past, Present, and Future coexist as fluid and enjoy the puzzle like I'm detective.
Jamie 黃家瑩
Thanks for Clapton's comment.
ReplyDeleteIt's "write diary" not "write dialy".
And thanks your comment again.
Jacob 林志憲
comment:
ReplyDeleteI wanna give a comment for william.
His post has two main ideas one of they talk landscape of Nigara why it attract many tourists another let readers know how to travel in the formidable Falls in many details
. At last he recommend one way to travel the Nigara.
Fareastern, 廖昌毅
Thanks Jason's post, I also like Death Note and I want to leave a comment to him.
ReplyDeleteIt's important for us to eat nutritious food, but it shoud be follow the food pyramid.
There are some different between old and new food pyramids that fruit from more to balanced and cereal require the most.
The newest food pyramid added doing exercise sixty minutes in one day.
Getting enough food, activity and sleep would train our brain to stay sharp and useful to our health.
By the way, I think some words maybe keying missing or error.
The word "nooles" I think it's "noodles" in third sentence.
The word "Death diary" should be "Death Note".
I think L isn't died by Death Note, but died by diabetes.
So, not only eating nutrition's food, but also doing some sports will useful to our health.
Jacob 林志憲
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ReplyDeleteTo Jeffrey :
ReplyDeleteMaybe you can take a deep breath, let you clam down when yor are anxious or your serious face makes everyone feel you are angry. By the way, you are really handsome when you are wearing some suitable clothes.
Jamie 黃家瑩
Revision:
ReplyDeleteI usually play poker with my friend.Playing poker can make me think how to defeat my friends.Everytime I hold my poker cards in my hands,and I need to think what my friend will do next time.Go through this process,I need to show my cards carefulily.Sometimes I must guess my teammate's card ,and analyze if I show this card whether I will be killed by my enemy.So,playing poker is a good way to exercise your brain.
Stanley 賀祥
Revision:
ReplyDelete"Which of the tips would help you most in your next interview? Why?"
The most thing I need to work on is to keep my faith. I get nervous easily and once I feel nervous, I can not articulate my thought and that will influence my performance. Therefore, I found a way to cheer myself up. I look at the mirror and smile to myself. And moreover, I talk to myself while I smile to myself. In this way, I can feel more courage and might have a better performance in the interview.
陳韻絜,Cindy
"Which of the tips would help you most in your next interview? Why?"
ReplyDeleteThe tip of first which is practice, practice, and practice would help me the most in my next interview. Although we already know well-prepared before the interview is important, we never know how to do specific. Sometimes we might list what we are going to say in mind, but we never spoke it loudly. When we were during the interview, we might say many buzzwords such as um. This might make the employer thought that you might prepare not enough or not fluently. If I articulated it out loud during rehearse, I might not only avoid empty phrase but be more confident. This tip also told me what to prepare such as the challenge I overcame or my job history. Once I went to job interview, I thought that I was well-prepared, but the direction of preparation is wrong. As a result, I just sit there said nothing. If I know this tip earlier, this embarrassing time would not happen. By knowing what to prepare might help me a lot.
黃旭瑩, Laura
RESPOND to Tobey
ReplyDeleteI am agreeing with him. After the interview, we always leave everything to god, and try not to think it again. If we can review it, we might learn from mistake.
黃旭瑩,Laura
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ReplyDeleteQ8: Among the activities available, which three would you choose to do?
ReplyDeleteRevision
All of the activities are attracting me, because through those ways we can visit Niagara from different sight and get different feeling about the falls. I prefer to visit Niagara in the most impressive way. So among those adventurous activities, the first one I want to pick up is going to the Observation Tower’s top in New York state. Since I was a child, I like to go to the bird’s-eye theater in science museum, so I think going to get the real bird’s-eye view of a world famous landscape will be an unforgettable memory. The second one I would choose to do is taking the Journey behind the Falls. We often watch fall in front of it, but seldom take a tour behind it, especially the biggest fall in the world. The huge white curtain attracts me to take a look of it. There are some research said that the falls will disappear in few years, so we have to hold the last chance to take the special journey. The third one I would like to take is the Maid of the Mist boat tour. Because this option is the most direct way to approach the fall and let us to feel it by our drenching body, I think this tour can satisfy our desire of being daredevils.
Wing 劉怡君
I would like to give a comment to William.
ReplyDeleteAfter reading his revision, I think it is fluency but the intro is a little too long. Because we have to finish our opinion in short article, the first paragraph seems not so fitting with the question. When we try to give an answer, we may be a little tethered by the question. How to answer the question directly instead of obliquely is what we have to learn.
Wing 劉怡君
Thanks for Rita's post. She articulates her opinion and has a real understanding of the relationship between photography and brain training.
ReplyDeleteAlthough the paragraph is short, it contains a main idea and details.For an answer of the question, it is very opportune and clear.
Amy, 簡孜芸
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ReplyDeleteWhat are you doing to keep your brain sharp?
ReplyDeleteI always wash the face in the morning to keep me awake and get brain fresh.
sometimes I will try more in doing things, not just always doing the same things to keep my brain sharp.
Reading is a good way to get the brain sharp,too.
David, 毛運韡
Comment for Amy, 簡孜芸
ReplyDeleteI like the experience about travel sharing by Amy. In the travel, you will have more special experience unlike ordinary. To leave your living environment, you can know the other thing like food, clothes, building, and nature. Those experiences will stimulate and beef up your brain, give you have robust brain.
劉威廷Wei
In the color-changing process described in the article,what amazes you the most?why?
ReplyDelete1.The reduced hours of daylight,rather than the prevailing temperature,determine when the leaves start to rereal their fall colors.
2.I learned the shortening days and reduced daylight of fall can effect leaves.
Vivky 李安翔
A comment for Cindy
ReplyDeleteI feel Cindy’s post is not only simple but also clear. At the beginning of her article, I can clearly know what happened when she interviewed, and then she use a vivid example to tell us how to conquer her nerves. Although the post is short, she still does well. The most important thing is her article makes me feel interesting and drive me to see downward during my reading. So I give her my praise here.
Clair 李玥瑩
Revision
ReplyDeleteThe talking tips can helpful my most in my next interview. Because my talking tip is not well and I’m an easy tense person when I in official situation. This time that talking is easiest to make a mistake. And then, talking tip is needs to practice. It can avoid to product mistake on talking. Therefore, more practice to talking tip can helpful me in my next interview and let me keep to relax.
Clement, 林庭瑋
I’m agree of Jack’s think. His ideas are same with me. Practicing is a importing method. That’s can helpful us good of interviews for resume inside and out.
ReplyDeleteClement, 林庭瑋
Which of the "legends" would you have most enjoyed witnessing? Why?
ReplyDeleteI have most enjoyed witnessing in "queen of the mist" who was motivated by the belief that barreling over the falls would make her rich and famous. Because I have never heard a person doing so dangerous escapade just for rich and famous. Finally, it is amazing that the daredevil is alive.
Eleanor,王盈茹
Revision
ReplyDeleteThere have many methods of keep my brain sharp, and playing games is my favorite way. When I want to play a game, at first, I should attuned to the game's rules, this could train my memory and comprehension. Games are divided into two kinds of dynamic and static, If playing a dynamic game,that will also train the muscles of the body; If playing a static game, Intelligence and concentration are usually required. Therefore, playing games is a good way to keep my brain sharp, and some games could also help me live with frugality.
willion 陳言銘
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ReplyDeleteI have a comment for Jason's post:
ReplyDeleteI very agree with your views. Whatever have a balanced diet, doing many sports, playing games, or have a enough sleep, all can keep our brain sharp.Therefore, we can know that there have many ways to keep our brain sharp, and we can choose our favorite to do.
willion 陳言銘
I think I have to get enough sleep in my life. Because I often stay up late now, that it harmful to my brain and body. And studies have shown a link between interrupted sleep and dementia. So I have to get enough sleep.
ReplyDeletepeter謝漢民
To Jamie:
ReplyDeleteThanks for your appreciation!!
Actually, I also haven’t seen “Lost” and don't know who is J.J. Abrams before.
After finishing this oral presentation, I learned and knew more information about them. Lost is really a fascinating series that attracting the audiences extremely.
About your post structure, I would like to give you some advice that your article needs a more powerful conclusion to strengthen your point at this issue.
Carol, 張靜茹
I have a comment for Jacob's post
ReplyDeleteTry to use the textual relationship and with more obvious connection to answer the question. That will be better.
Peter 謝漢民
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ReplyDeleteI haven't seen J.J.Abrams' works before.But I heard a ;ot about "Lost".I like to find clues and try to figure out what happened and what the truth is.So if I have enough free time,I'd like to watch his projects,like the most famous one "Lost" and his latest work "Fringe".They're both seem interesting,and they also can let my brain keep sharp,too.
Meggie,賴婉蓉
I want to post a comment to Peter
ReplyDeleteYour post is simple and make people know what you want to say clearly.But maybe you can extend your idea,and talk us more about the reason why lack sleep will harm our brain.
Meggie,賴婉蓉
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ReplyDeleteKeeping brain to stay sharp is a important thing in all of people. But how to achieve that purpose? Taking me for example, when a semesterovered and the vacation came, I came back home from school and didn't read textbookds anymore until new semester coming. I had felt my ability about reading, talking and writing were getting worse. So for my own experience, I had gone to bookstore to read some out-of-class reading materials or learned some new instrument. By reading and learning, my brain won't get worse as vacation omes.
吳宛霖 Christina
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ReplyDeleteHow to keep our brain sharp? I have some tips can to beef up my brain.First, practice writing with your non-domunant hand several minutes every day. This will fire up your brain and neurons. Second, take class throughut your lifetime. Because learning produces structral and chemical changes in the brain. So, this are useful which can make your brain to work and excite things. If you keep discipline your brain, you can to ward off dementia.
Kai, 凱成
A comment for Jeffrey.
ReplyDeleteJeffrey clearly indicate out three points that she has to be careful first and then explain the reasons in the following. I like the way she express her idea because that is different from my writing style. ( I will continue the explaination after the first point. )
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ReplyDeleteI have seen one of JJ Abrams' works "Lost",but I don't really like its story line.I thinks its plot is somehow out of logic.For example,how can people still alive for a long time after being stranded in a mysterious island after their airplane crashed into the ocean.
Then the story keep going on the island,and some murders and tragedies happened.
In my opinion,I don’t think the story of lost isn’t attractive and interesting enough to catch my eye.Moreover,it’s not my favorite types of TV series.I prefer X-files,CSI-NY,Supernatural,and Dresden to the lost.
Comment for Carol:
ReplyDeleteI think she wrote very well, because she talked about what she was learned and gave examples. The structure used general-example and question-answer.So,I deem her paper is very fluency.
Kia,凱成
Comment to Jason:
ReplyDeleteUsing a question to be a opening can catch readers' eyes.It's a successful opening!
Then you gave the examples to the opening question and also gave the details and some explanation for your examples.That makes the reader easy to understand.
Leana 高儷芬
Train your brain to stay sharp
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I have a good habbit to train my brian that is playing Majhong, but also have a bad thing that is staying late or all night. While semina or lab meeting coming, I often worked all night to prepare that. That may injury my health and brain.
Rex 陳宥任
Sorry!! I forgot your name. (The worst thing is I lost the paper)
ReplyDeleteAs the article which I met last week. I think you can recount you detills more clearly, and gave more examples to us.
Rex 陳宥任
I always play basketball every day to keep my brain sharp. Because it makes me think clearly and have fun. I feel dizzy after I study, and going to play basketball is a good way to relax my brain. I can also take excise and beef up my body, and can decompress the stress in spirit. Besides, I have social contact with my friends simultaneously. From these ways I have fun and feel happy. So playing basketball is my way to keep my brain sharp.
ReplyDeleteHoward 吳朗岳
Comment on Kai’s post
ReplyDeleteThis post’s organization is like “question-answer.” He mentioned the question about how to keep our brain sharp first, and then he gave two examples to us. It about practice writing with our non-dominant hand and take class through our lifetime. I think he answered the question well and list the details. So I deem that his post is complete.
Howard 吳朗岳
A comment about Kai's post
ReplyDeleteI aggreewith him.And his post is clear and fluent.I think practicing writing with your non-domunant hand several minutes every day will actually improve our brain,but it needs take long time to practice continually,so it is the difficult part to do.
Tony,志永
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ReplyDeleteWe should do something exerise to beef up our brain. For example , we can try to use our non-dominant hand ,and that will exercise the opposite side of our brain. We can learn a new language ,and that will work our brain to think the meaning back and forth between tne new language and the native ons. We can also go gardening,that will reduce our stress and exercise our visual and spatial ability in our brain. Above that, it will be good for us to exercise our brain and ward off dementia.
Ranson 林叡呈
I’ve seen few episodes from the LOST.
ReplyDeleteThe first time I watched, I felt a little confused by the special time line. When the scenes jumped back and forth, it wasn’t easy for me to understand. There were so many questions in the series like mysterious people and monsters. There were also some supernatural incidents like strange numbers seemed to point out something I didn’t know. And how the marooned people’s future and past were be connected to the plane crash. When I looked back and thought thoroughly, I could dissolve the puzzle piece by piece. And figuring it out was satisfied, it was an addictive entertainment for me.
I liked the series at the beginning, but I felt tired because there are too many seasons in the Lost. It was hard to stick with it. I can’t miss a single episode, because I might not catch up the following episodes. So, I gave up eventually. Maybe if there were lesser seasons would be much better.
Fay 謝欣蕙
I have a comment about Jason's revision
ReplyDeleteThis is a no doubt about takes more nutrients from vegetable, rice, even chocolate make our brain more healthier. Because of the nutrients can provide some materials for brain used as it working. Not only take food but also sport is a key factor affecting brain function. That can makes your brain blood unobstructed and provide more oxygen for brain. Exclude the food taking and exercise doing, there are many ways to beef up the function of brain. Include attend social activity, second language learning, etc. If only you pay effort, you'll see the happy success.
吳宛霖 Christina
Comments to Laura,
ReplyDeletei think Laura really give us a useful advise.What's the main problem for the students in Taiwan is we don't have confidence in speaking a foreign language.We have learned English for more than 10 years , we have known much words and phrases,we have had nice listening and reading ability.However , we still feel trouble in oral and writing.that is because we don't have enough courage to speak it up and loudly.So,if we can overcome the stress in speaking a foreign language,never mind the grammar is correct or not.I think that will improve our oral ability.
Ranson 叡呈
Leave a comment to Howard.
ReplyDeleteYou write your own personal experience and it’s pretty convincible. You also list other benefits of playing basketball than can back your paragraph up.
By the way, playing basketball is an effective method for you.I think you should stick with it.
Fay 謝欣蕙
Question: What are you doing to keep your brain sharp?
ReplyDeleteAnswer: There are many tips may help from the textbook. One of them is to develop more than one hobby.
I have been doing that. Two of my hobbies are playing table tennis and playing go games. The two are belong different types: one is dynamic activity and the other is static activity. Playing table tennis exercises my body, and it keeps me healthy. At the same time when playing sports,it also fires up the brain's neurons. On the other hand, playing go games have to think. By means of thinking and thinking,it is taxing the brain.
I believe that not only we concentrate on studies,but also we develop hobbies will really keep the brain sharp and be helpful for learning.
Vivian, 許雅筑
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ReplyDeleteQuestion: Which of the tips would help you most in your next interview? why?
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I think that “arrive in a timely manner” is helpful for me. Before I read magazine, I always arrive the place of interview as early as I can, sometimes even earlier than 20 minutes. I didn’t know that will set interviewers and staffs off. But now I realize that if you arrive earlier than 10 minutes doesn’t mean you respect this interview, it just opposite. But how much early we can arrive? I think maybe 5-10 minutes just fine. The time enough to let me get ready for interview, maybe I can practice rehearsing again. So if I have to take interview now, I will notice myself that just being a few minutes early is fine. Sometime I adjust my watch faster than 10 minutes or set an alarm clock to warn myself. Although don’t arrive earlier than 10 minutes, don’t be late! It is rude the same with arriving earlier than 10 minutes.
Cindy,宋芳儒
I have a comment for six
ReplyDeleteI think your article is a little short. Maybe you can tell us more specifics about how to do for practice interview. You can take yourself for example or write more things about your thought. Try to use the strategy of “G-L-G” can let us realize your contention well.
Cindy,宋芳儒
Comment to Annie:
ReplyDeleteThe paragraph has both a clear and strong opening and closing. In the body of the paragraph,you used the cause-effect pattern to account for meditation. I think it let us get points easily. And I think the length of the paragraph is opportune. We can know completed information. Also, I like the idea of meditation,I will try to give me some time to do that.
Vivian, 許雅筑
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ReplyDeleteComputers became the one of important parts in our daily life recently. It helped us to achieve lots of things everyday such as calculating data, quality controlling and storing information. But we did not still satisfy its function yet. For this purpose, physicists at Stanford University have identified an important trait of bismuth telluride that could become an heir to silicon, perhaps transforming the computing industry. This new discovery uses electronic spin to carry information, part of new field called spintronics. It can travel without resistance that means lower power use and make it possible for smaller devices to process information. Although it’s not applicable now, computers may become cheaper, smaller and more powerful in the future.
Chris 趙中譽
I have a comment to Cindy.
ReplyDeleteI think your textual-relationship may be problem-solution. Your article’s opening, body and ending all are sufficient. It is fluent and clear.
Chris 趙中譽
Question: Which of the tips would help you most in your next review? Why?
ReplyDeleteI think Keep your faith is a good tip that help you not so nervous. Don’t so nervous will facilitate you have good performance on interview. Because not nervous can let your brain keep clearly to salve interviewer’s question. And it also can make you look like to prepare sufficient. If you keep your faith that I think you beef up confidence. Interviewers should like a interviewee have confidence. Therefore keep your faith to go into a interview.
Jeff 張競元
I have comment to Chris.
ReplyDeleteI think your first sentence associate with last sentence. And then you write some specific of this topic. Therefore I think your textual-relationship is general-specific and G-L-G. It is a good essay.
Jeff 張競元
comment for Vivian
ReplyDeleteYou have pack up many ideas together; you also give details and example that is easy to understand. The little problem is, it seems that you don’t have a main sentence, its ok because you had integrate you word at the last sentence. I think it will be better if you put it at the first sentence.
Stanley 許耿豪