Please make your post and comment here for this week (11/04-11/10).
The post should be a 1-paragraph revison of your in-class writing on the worksheet.
(NOTE 1. 貼文為改寫後的文章！)
(NOTE 2. 未出席同學請主動發信給老師，索取題目！)
Besides, you are supposed to
- rewrite the short passage with clear textual relationships
(Read your classmate's comment first!) - include at least 2 words (from the magazines, either Oct. or Nov.) in your revision
As for this week's comment,
it should be about your classmate's post/revision.
Comment on the overall structure, rather than on the mechanism.
Let me know if you need help or have questions.
Wendy
Laziness in the workplace.
ReplyDeleteLaziness is a serious problem during the work.If you are lazy,it means that you don't want to do what you should do,or even do nothing but sitting in your office for rest.On the other hand,laziness is also a bad attitude,showing that you are someone who's not responsible and trustworthy.As the old saying"As you sow, so you reap.",don't try to be laziness in your workplace.
Leana 高儷芬
Gluttony- no shortcuts to the achievement.
ReplyDeleteOne of the seven deadly career sins is gluttony. It is a sin, because people will get a promotion but lost his wits. A person who is gluttony means who always wants instant success and full credit for it. He/She always tries to conceive a quick way for a job well done, but when he/she gets what he/she wants, he/she forgets any help along the way. This kind of people always break up the rapport in workplace, and make him/herself be marooned. We know that there is no shortcuts to the achievement and we can't forget the help from the pack of our partners when we succeed. Then, avoid becoming a gluttony person will help us to assure career advancement in a way that is right and acceptable.
Wing 劉怡君
Revision:
ReplyDeleteSelfish:
Selfish is one of the seven sins in work place. The people who show their selfish character always let others feel uncomfortable. Because they just care themselves success more than the payment in working processing. And they only think about the benefit they can get, overlooking that: all the achievement should distribute to every co-worker, not just their contribution. After all, selfish people will let office’s atmosphere become bad and may make themselves into a marooned place. It’s also a terrible situation to their career. When boss assess the candidates of promotion, they must be last choice. So we better try to avoid such sin appear in our work attitude.
The comment for Wing劉怡君:
I am so appreciate about her writing. She could us simple words to transmit fluency meaning, let me read her topic very smoothly.
But when I checked the word “Gluttony” mean, its meaning is like “eat too much”…….it really made me confuse about it.
Yuki 張郁琦
Revision:
ReplyDeleteSelfish will become misguide. Most of thing doing together with your partners or friends will be fast and perfect. For example, if you need to lay out a project for your boss, you will need ample information and ideal. Selfish will let no one want to help you, and you can not do the project prefect. And most of times you need to implement the work with your team. If everyone in your time is not selfish, you will happier in your work. So don’t be selfish and concerned other colleagues are important.
劉威廷Wei
POST:
ReplyDeleteAS you have an interview,all of your behaviors when the interview is starting are very important.Including yor tone,speaking rate,clothing,attitude and responses etc.,these are the necessary points you should prepare and practice before that.
But almost everyone would forget that not only the inside behaviors are important but also the "outside behaviors" .What's the outside behavior?It means the behaviors before your term starets.Some people may get nervous or feel boring for waiting,then take out his/her cell-phone ,and speaking loudly.The behavior will contribute to disturbances in that other interviewers may need rest and calm,and the rude behavior will affect other's emotions.
The outside behaviors are not just a respect to others but also reflect your personality.
Shelley林姿瑩
Laziness in the workplace
ReplyDeleteLaziness means that you are unwilling to do things and you have less passion for your job, so you spend much time doing little work.It is not efficient at all. You drag everything as late as possible. Your coworkers may not like to work with you. For example, you always delay and you show no enthusiasm for your job.You should be prompted to finish your work on time.Everybody likes to work with people who are diligent and active because everybody yearns to go back home earlier. So,laziness is really big sin in the workplace.
Annie彭雅玟
Comment:
ReplyDeleteAccording to Yuki's post,she mentions that how bad the selfish is in the work place.
I think it's very clear and fluent,and she uses the tip "open the door,then see the mountain"in the first paragraph .The only should be refined is that we need more description about the selfish then use the word"after all".
is--->because--->and --->after all
Shelley林姿瑩
I would like to leave a comment for劉威廷Wei
ReplyDeleteYou gave a good example and you used the cause-effect of textual relationship well.Maybe you can describe more about the disadvantages of selfishness, and your revision would become more complete and specific.For example, if you are selfish , you are unable to get promotion. Selfishness hampers you from getting more salary and erode your relationdships with colleagues.
Annie彭雅玟
POST:
ReplyDelete"Anger"
In the workplace, emotion control is very important. While you get anger,the people who are around you and they will feel that. No matter you are do something right or wrong It will damage your reputation and credibility. The ability of people to find ways for people to find an excuse for incompetence. So the boss decrease the evaluation to you and you will rarely promoted. All people were believed that if you have a good mood on you and you always do the reght things.
kyo, 許育民
comment to Annie:
ReplyDeleteAnnie's post use the "General-example" in her post.My suggest is that you can describe the other things, that is not about work but in the workplace.Such as get along with colleagues or superiors status etc. I belived that will make your content of the article more completely.
kyo,許育民
My revision: Laziness in the workplace
ReplyDeleteLaziness in the workplace is one of the most critical sins.Because it affects not only the efficeny when working but also the relationship between your coworkers.For example,if everyone works hard but few people don’t put their mind on the work,instead,they just surf the internet and use facebook or do somethong unhelpfully.So those who works hard don’t want to team with those laze people.In addition,ervery boss hates lazy employees because it may decrease the throughput of the company.Therefore,people should work hard and don’t be lazy,and may be the boss will give some reward if you do well when working.To sum up,the more lazy you are ,the more risks you will be fired!!
Tony, 志永
Laziness
ReplyDeleteLaziness is the killer in the workplace, people often use their work time doing other thing that have no concern with the work such as keep checking e-mails, playing web game. They delay the schedule just for another cup of coffee or one minute more web surfing. The next day they shall need to finish the work yesterday and the schedule will be delay again. It’s a vicious cycle. These people’s detrimental behavior will let the employers feel that they can’t are not good enough to handle the job and have no respect to it.
Stanley 許耿豪
Comment for kyo
ReplyDeleteKyo point out the main idea in the first sentence, he tell us emotion control is very important. It a good example of open the door and see the mountain. After that, he start to say why emotion control is very important, I think it a good used of General-specifics
Stanley 許耿豪
Anger
ReplyDeleteDon’t anger in workplace! Even if the taxing work frustrate you so much, you still should and must to hold your fierce temper and always keep calm, or the fury may be detrimental to the rapport with your coworker and even prompt the hire to kick you out. For the reason, don’t anger in workplace is what I emphasize again, and you have to do and finish the work well without terrible grimace on your face.
張郡綸, Maggy.
Selfish
ReplyDeleteWe may feel angry about our coworker who always think themselves , for example,
a man again the bonus or benefit alone and he doesn’t share anyone .Even though we are in the trouble, he just do nothing for us . It is someone of selfish we may avoid
because we want to work friendly with others. When we are in the workplace, be polite to others , usually asking others who may be in the trouble. We can share the outcome or bonus with others that they would know we are a team, a group, not a one.
Alex 蘇蔚鴻
Lust
ReplyDeleteWe should avoid lust in workplace. Lust means that you spend an inordinate amount of time on what you don't have, just like other's work achievements. Lust will foster your bad attitude and negative demeanor. The aslvation is that you should make the most out of your current possition at the moment in time rather than lust for anything or everything. Always remember that it is very important to hold on a good attitude in workplace.
Eleanor, 王盈茹
Gluttony
ReplyDeleteTo be gluttonous in workplace is not a good attitude. It's important that what you've got, then you can do.
If a person that he really want to be promoted in office, and become rich. Although he has opportunities to ask for his authority, he doesn't has the ability to competence for the job. Then he will make a lot of mistakes, and get fired.
In my point of view, I think that people should act according to their abilities. Don't have high aims but low abilities. The more things you do, the more failture you will face. Therefore people should keep learning and filling up yourself.
Lena楊雅迪
A comment for Leana
ReplyDeleteThanks for your share. You give the specific illustration. It's good. Maybe you can give us some examples will be great!
Lena楊雅迪
Anger
ReplyDeleteAnger is a fierce emotion we often have in life. Even it's just an emotion, it could also become a sin in our workplace. Sometimes we 'll get angry or unhappy about things happens in our job. For example, your boss is shutting at you in front of your coworkers for no reasons. As an ordinary person, you definitely get unhappy about it. With all the anger coming up and ready to explode, it's important to control your temper at this moment. Silly actions like bounceback is never a smart way to work off. Take a deep breath and try not to let the other detects your emotion. By this way, you may not make yourself better, but you can avoid the situation from getting worser!
丘建賢 William
Comment to Lena
ReplyDeleteYou have tell us why 'Be gluttony' is a bad attitude, that's good. But for most people including me, the word 'gluttony' is a new word for us, maybe you can give a short definition in the beginning which can make the passage more clearly.
William,丘建賢
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ReplyDeleteThis comment has been removed by the author.
ReplyDeleteGluttony
ReplyDeleteMeaning of gluttony is eating too much to one can take, and it's a bad attitude in workplace, though many useful advices told us that we better have confidence and have courage to try, take care jobs that we can't handle is still very unwise, when people being promote or given an important job with out ready for bigger challenges, most of them end up with failure, and the working is not the only problem they have, there are family's common consensus and effect of life style of one own, as the conclusion our group given, act according one's ability
Stephen 王信夫
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ReplyDeleteRevision:
ReplyDelete"Anger in the workplace"
It is worse to anger in the workplace that we must avoid.
We shouldn't work with emotion or we should control our emtion in any case.
Because anger would influence your working efficiency and attitude,that might make us to think rationally.
It get worse and worse to the relationship of colleagues and even it might make us to lose the job.
So we should be a cheerful worker, it would facilitate us to work cheerfully.
And we will become an up-and comer.
Clapton 高毓斌
A comment to Leana :
ReplyDeleteThank for your sharing, we've learned a lot about laziness from your article, but It will be better if you can tell us more about what will happen if someone show laziness in workplace.
Stephen 王信夫
Laziness
ReplyDeleteLaziness at workplace is sin.
If you’re a laziness person in workplace like dormant on duty, your boss or chief will assess you no value for the company because of too less work. Colleagues get the same pay but they have more work then you, so there is laziness person will makes person feel uncomfortable and anger.
Fareastern,廖昌毅
Comment to Kyo:
ReplyDeleteHe uses general to specific method to interpret what would become when we anger in the workplace.
But I think him lack the echo with head and tail.
His contention is very clear but I think he could talk about how to improve it.
Clapton 高毓斌
Laziness in the workplace would let you lossing your job.
ReplyDeleteHowever, what is laziness, for example, sleeping at the time you need work or on the web games like facebook at the time.
After all, you haven't doing work and other one done, so you might be fir or see other one increase their level.
Doing your work you need to do, and don't do laziness things that is no useful to your work.
Jacob 林志憲
Pride in the job interview
ReplyDeleteIn the job interview,pride is the taboo of making success.Not onlt the boss feels your rude but also thinks you are too ego.The interviewer ofen remembers the attitude is the important way to make success, so be not pride and not too shy to show your good attitude are most important to get the job!
David 毛運韡
Don't anger in your workplace:
ReplyDeleteAnger is one of people's nature. It can relax pressure when you feel unhappy.
But you can't anger in your workplace, and it is a detrimental behavior for workplace.
Following results may be caused if you sulk in unsuitable place.
1. If you feel anger, it will influence the mood around other peoples.
And then everyone may dislike you, you will meet the most terrible day.
2. If you are staff, you meet unhappy things, you must control your mood.
Otherwise, when your boss see your anger, you maybe loss your job.
3. If you are chief, you also have to control you mood when you feel anger.
Otherwise, your staffs maybe dislike you, and then working efficiency is very low.
After working, you will be a lonely person.
You don't anger in workplace.
If your boss lash out at you, you have to remember control temper, anything will go over,
keeping your calm, maybe you feel happy.
If misfortune come off and on. Don't complain destiny, and don't anger for other people,
you can think this misfortune is testing by god, and you don't feel unhappy.
Jason 翁哲盛
Laziness is definitely not allowed in a workplace. Every employer want to have a aspiring employee and other people would like to work with a enthusiastic colleague as well. For instance, if someone just keeping doing his/her own thing or fooling around, that will make others angry and may feel that he/she is selfish. And laziness might also hamper the working process and become a tax. As a consequence, do not express laziness in the workplace or you will become a unwelcome employee.
ReplyDelete陳韻絜,Cindy
Laziness in the workplace is the worst thing when you work.Although laziness is our nature,it is a taboo in our workplace.I got a part-time job of waiter before.Everytime I tried to do my best for my job,there was always a guy sitting on the chair and watching other people working.Without doubt,the guy was fired by the boss.So we can know obviously that laziness is what we must not to have in the workplace.
ReplyDeleteStanley 賀祥
Comment to Fareastern:
ReplyDeleteThanks Fareastern's post, it let me thinking the advertisement "Zespri". Getting more nutrition would beef up your spirit. We have to concentrate without laziness in the workplace.
Jacob 林志憲
I want give a comment for Alex’s post
ReplyDeleteHis post gave us a example at first, And he explain “selfish” in detail. The most important is that in summary he write how to avoid selfish.
Fareastern,廖昌毅
Don’t anger in workplace
ReplyDeleteEmotional management is very important in workplace or anywhere.
And favorable emotional management can make you have more opportunity for promotion than the other candidate.
When you anger in the workplace often would let you losing your job.
Remember if your boss lashes out at you, you have to control your emotion, anything will be gone.
Peter 謝漢民
Revision: Selfish
ReplyDeleteIn the work, you would contribution to yourself for the company or team and do the content of work together. Don’t selfish in everything, when you selfish to everybody that they will selfish with you. If you reconstitute your personality, you could obtain more and more.
Jack 蘇仕傑
For many persons’post
ReplyDeleteMany persons say laziness in the workplace is the worst thing. Even though laziness is our nature, but when we work in the workplace and we have to work hard. So we have to concentrate without laziness in the workplace.
Peter 謝漢民
A Deadly Workplace Sin
ReplyDelete"pride"
In a workplace, work attitude is very important, and it can decide whether you successfully. A deadky workplace sin is mean what if you with these sin to work, you will be fired. For example, pride is one of these deadly workplace sin. Why a person with pride does not welcom? An appropriate degree of self-confidence is good, however, if it too over to accept the views of others, and no one wants to work with you. So, never excessive pride in the workplace.
willion 陳言銘
Comment to skylatte：
ReplyDeleteskylatte thought that we should avoid displaying our emotion in the workplace, particularly is angry, skylatte also mentioned that angry will affect the working efficiency and the manner, even loses the work, these showing let us understand the result which in the workplace that angry institute possibly brings, but I thought that if skylatte may point out the actual case, certainly can support skylatte ‘s opinion, can also convince the reader to believe that should avoid in the operational site displaying the angry mood as far as possible. By joseph 黃昭通
I agree Peter's post:
ReplyDeleteEmotional management is very important for anyone, however, emotional management is also difficult for many people to achieve. In fact, many people unhappy or not going well at work, because they have poor emotional management and easy angry. A good emotional management is not only useful at our work but also perfect our lives, so it is a slill what must for everyone to learn.
willion 陳言銘
A comment to Tony
ReplyDeleteThe pattern of organization is a good paradigm of general-example, which can make the readers understand what a critical sin laziness in the workplace is, and the textual relationship, G-L-G, can give us a clear concept of laziness as well, which can let every know why and how laziness lead to a badly consequence.
張郡綸, Maggy.
Don't anger in workplace
ReplyDeleteEveryone wants to be stellar worker. One of the big point is don't anger in workplace. In the workplace, each people probably have many work to complete. Moreover the manager will give many pressures certainly. However, has the good mood as well as maintains the vigor is a key at workplace. If the staff in the work situation anger, they will hinder other people. And will cause others' mood change to unstable. The business in company usually passes on by way of one person to another person, so be anger can't get help from people and works. Therefore, I think that have a good mood in the workplace is more important than another skills.
Jeffrey 陳庭筠
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ReplyDeleteAbout Jason's revision:
ReplyDeleteI think that he uses good structure in his post.
At first, he explains the subject why anger is not good in workplace.
And then he listed three points to explanation details.
Finally he has made a summary in view of the subject. It is a perfect short article.
Jeffrey 陳庭筠
I would like to give a comment to Annie.
ReplyDeleteAfter reading her post I think it is fluency overall. She use a significant beginning in order to tell readers her topic and this is a best start for a little article but the connections between sentences are a little weak. Almost every sentence can be a single one. Maybe this problem can be solved by using connective fitly.
Wing 劉怡君
Don't be lazy in workplace
ReplyDeleteLaziness is a contributing sin in the workplace. In the workplace, you have to do your own tasks and missions in time and even in a well output. You can learn lots of experiences and abilities when doing the jobs. It is common that you may meet many problems and struggles in your jobs. The resistance is an important teacher who teaches you more valuable abilities to face these tough situations. Do not be too lazy about your tasks in your job, because they are greatly helpful to your career life.
Laziness
ReplyDeleteLaziness is a sin in anyplace especially in workplace. When someone has this sin, he does not want to work or make any effort to do anything and he will do nothing in his life. For example, when he get the chance to earn more money, but he is so lazy to do more thing and finally the cordial up-and-comer will replace him and then he miss the chance. So do not be laziness in workplace or you will do nothing in your job.
Jamie 黃家瑩
Laziness in the workplace
ReplyDeleteI think laziness is the worst attitude in the work place. We should know how to overcome it. We should always try to figure out ways that accelerate fun at workplace so that we can always be working at our peak energy levels. The more we contribute to our work the more will be our satisfaction levels but we must make sure that we get a lot of fun out of it. For example, we should decorate the workplace. Decorations cultivate an environment that looks good. When it looks good, it feels good. This means, it creates a fun atmosphere in which everyone can enjoy.
Jessica,林瑞音
Laziness in the workplace
ReplyDeletehere is my revision:
Laziness is the worst attitude in the work place. For instance, not until the deadline won’t you finish the files 、always being the latest one entering the office and the first one who leaves、invariably put yourself in the passive position …and so on.
In your boss’ point of view, above circumstances means you are lack of enthusiasm 、trying every way to fool around during the working hours. As for your co-workers , being lazy will make you be marooned in the office , because you may not follow their steps for you didn’t’ make a good prepare for the proposal or a business cooperation.
All of these reasons can intimidate your promotion even lose the job.
Rita 曾思蒨
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ReplyDeleteSelfish will become misguide.
ReplyDeleteSelfish is an unpresentable personality in any occasion not mention in working place.
When you work with a lot of colleagues, you must face a situation which is that you should collaborate with your colleagues to finish a project. If in this moment, one of co-worker is selfish, others must be influenced, leading everyone doesn’t want to work hard on the project, the worst situation is everyone doesn’t trust each other. Conclusively the project will be doomed to failure. Finally it may affect the atmosphere of the whole company, which is unresolved to lead the company come to standstill. So we must be aware that “selfish” can’t appear in working place.
Clair 李玥瑩
I'd like to leave a comment to Lena:
ReplyDeleteAs I first saw the word” Gluttony” ,I thought the article is trying to tell us not to eat too fast in our working place. But after reading your post, I finally understand the true meaning of “Gluttony” because you did a great job on “explaining”. But ,sorry for my offense, the last paragraph does not have good connective to link all of the sentences together, but I trust you will notice that next time.
Rita 曾思蒨
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ReplyDeleteSelfish
ReplyDeleteTo be selfish will stop your success. When you are in workplace, you face a pack of people everyday. You can't finish a program just on your own, instead, carrying out a program needs many people's help.
First, a leader should hold on the overall situation, then he or she allocates tasks to the next level directors. And there are different kinds of detail jobs need several team members to do separately.
If anyone is selfish in a work team,like ignoring the team work dates, the program will not be done well possibly, and that might affect your job schedule even everyone's.
So, never be selfish and learn to cooperate with others. The synergy will be great and it is one way toward success.
Vivian, 許雅筑
A comment to Jack
ReplyDeleteAlthough a lot of people have the same topic with me, but finally I choose Jack's article to finish my comment.
It's indeed a short post,I suppose you are a good writer because you mention about two points on your article: "Don’t selfish in everything, when you selfish to everybody that they will selfish with you" and "If you reconstitute your personality, you could obtain more and more." But if you make an example to describe each of them, it will lead your article more complete and intriguing.
Clair 李玥瑩
I want to talk about the relationship between "selfish" and "workplace".
ReplyDeleteIn the workplace, everyone has his own responsibility and job to fulfill. But, we shouldn't just focus on the things on our list! We must be kind and help our coworkers to fulfill their jobs spontaneous when we have extra time and vigor. If we can be such generous people, we will not only win a good relation with others, but also obtain some reciprocation from our coworkers when we face difficulty.
For students, school is our workplace, and classmates are just like our coworkers. Hence, we can do many things to prevent being selfish, such as sharing informations, team work, and always being glad to help others.
So, I believe that being generous but not too selfish is a necessary attitude toward workplace.
Amy, 簡孜芸
Comment for Stephen:
ReplyDeleteBy reading your article, I really understand what gluttony means in workplace. And I agree with your view, it's vigilant for us to assess our work condition.
I think it is great that you defined the word at the opening, in this way, we could surely have the same recognition about the subject. It facilitates reading later comprehension. Maybe you can use a full stop at the begining of the paragraph then make a powerful topic sentence.
Vivian,許雅筑
Comment for rita
ReplyDeleteWe all have the same experience about that , we hand on our homework before the deadline , we meet the date late not on time , we study before the midterm or final.
I think lazy is a important factor .We always think we have much time to deal with
,so we do other things we like and forget the time until the deadline. Until now ,
I can’t promise I have done all things on time not in time . The only we can do
just do immediately as faster as we can. .
Alex 蘇蔚鴻
Laziness
ReplyDeleteWhen you are in the work time,but you don'tspend your time in there.And think of other things without work.
Laziness in the workplace wikk have you sitting idle,watching others surpass you in success and authority.
In the end,if you hope success and anthority in your workplace,doing right thing in the right time. 李安翔Vicky
7 sins in workplace-Glutonny
ReplyDeleteSome behaviors we can't do in workplace,like pride,envy...etc.And the glutonny is one of them.Gluttony means who takes all credit and wants to reach achivement with less efforts.He also forgets who gave help to him and doesn't appreciate.These people don't be liked,because they just did less work and got all honor.So if we want to be popular in workplace,don't forget to thank and do your best in the team.
Meggie,賴婉蓉
I want to post a comment to Willion
ReplyDeleteYour beginning clearly tells us what you want to say,I think that's the good way to let us get it.Pride is a bad behavior of relationship.We all know that,so maybe you can give us more example about "pride".I think that will be better.
Meggie,賴婉蓉
Don’t anger in workplace
ReplyDeleteMuch of the problem contributing to the epidemic anger and violence occurring in the workplace is that many people have attitudes about themselves, about others and about life which predispose them to behave in ways that are irrational and disrespecting towards others. We can't put our emotion in the primary importance in the workplace and communicate with others with the rational attitude. And then we can observe others' values and distinction by communicating. Link up the thing for the attitude of respecting the other side each other afterwards. Avoid having anger mood to emerge in workplace
Clement, 林庭瑋
I’m agree Jack’s post. In the work, we should pay for the work with all strength. In the team, we should communicate with each other and study with the partner. We can achieve to get twice the result with half the effort at the work.
ReplyDeleteClement, 林庭瑋
Don’t anger in workplace
ReplyDeleteWhen we work, some thing we should remember what don’t to do. One of that is don’t anger in workplace. No matter our boss or manager require us to do something boring or complex can let us on the go, we have to say “yes or OK” and just do it quickly. Don’t be angry in workplace, because they will think our work attitude is not good. On the other hands, many of work have teamwork. Even if our idea is different between other people, we should communicate with our teammates. Thinking positive, it is maybe a good way to let our ability to be robust.
Howard 吳朗岳
About Jeffrey’s article, I think keep good mood when we work is important. We complete our work quickly and don’t feel tired in good mood. If we feel unhappy and become angry, take a break is a good way to smooth our mind. Remember don’t hinder other people. So I agree with him.
ReplyDeleteHoward 吳朗岳
A comment to Vivian
ReplyDeleteI like the first line you post, simple and clear, let me quick understand selfish will what? But I think it is not too close the tile on line 3 and 4, maybe is my illusion.
Jamie 黃家瑩
Comment for Kyo’s article:
ReplyDeleteI agree this account of his content, it’s refer to emotion when you anger for work, that you will not be successful in work and interpersonal relationship even lose the chance of raising grade.
Jack 蘇仕傑
Revision
ReplyDeleteLaziness in the workplace
The worst thing in work place is there a lazy worker. It are not only working ineffectively but may cause accidents that detrimental. It also a bad attitude in work. We should beefing up our mind and keeping vitality in working that can make self and company being better.
Rex 陳宥任
About Meggie's article, I think those guys are around us generally, and we should know the significance about teamwork from Meggie's article.
ReplyDeleteRex 陳宥任
*Laziness in the workplace
ReplyDeleteWe should have an active attitude in our workplace, never be lazy when we are working. Because no one want a lazy person to be whose partner or employer. We have to concentrated on everything we should do and achieve our task in time even earlier. All of all, we need contain positive attitude in the workplace rather than lazy.
楊敏汎 Grace
comment to William's post:
ReplyDeleteYou point out "anger" in a short sentence to define it at the beginning.I think it's a brief and clear opening.Then you narrow down and give the example make the reader easy to understand.And I think the fluency of your article is pretty well!
Leana高儷芬
Selfish is a sin of workplace which means do your job only without caring others. Sometimes there are an emergency. For example, a call from hospital tells you that your Mom needs a surgery right away. At this time, you might ask your colleagues to help your job, so that you can go to the hospital and see your Mom. If he refuses to do, you will think he is selfish no matter what reason is. I am not saying that we should do any favors even it is unreasonable. If we can give a hand to someone, they might pay your back. Never think that I just need to do my job well. Don’t be too selfish, or you’ll be hated by people.
ReplyDelete黃旭瑩 Laura
Respond to Rex 陳宥任
ReplyDeleteYou might give us the definition of laziness. Make your point more specific. You can use some examples.
黃旭瑩 Laura
A comment to Clement:
ReplyDeleteI'm agree Clement.
If you carry bad emotion in workplace, you may effect other people mood,
and then everyone's mood change worse. and that day is not happy day.
Jason 翁哲盛
A comment to Laura's post
ReplyDeleteI like the example she gave us. She used a example that close to everyone, and then also post a strong cause at the end.
陳韻絜,Cindy
Laziness in the workplace
ReplyDeleteLaziness is a bed attitude in the workplace. When other people work very hard, but you do your things-sleeping, playing games or didn't do anythings. It will let you sitting idle and watch other success. The attitude hampered your work progress and let you finich later. Then you will lost your job. The salvation: "trea your work every day and finish them on the day". Be lay out your time!
Kai 楊凱成
Comment for Leana's post
ReplyDeleteShe is talking about what is laziness and giveing other felling in her post. Then we can clear know the definition and disadvantage.
Kai 楊凱成
A comment to Laura's post
ReplyDeleteAbout selfish of the workplace, you gave us a vivid example that we could realize how disagreeable a selfish person is. The example really beef up your point of view.
However, I want to suggest that you can add some main idea sentences at the beginning and the end of your article. That will not only make your article more complete, but also let readers get more understanding from your article.
Amy, 簡孜芸
Command to Meggie
ReplyDeleteMeggie use one of the textual relationship “general-specific”.First indicate that there are seven sins that we should avoid in the workplace.Then take one of seven sins to support more specific.In addition, Meggie also give the clear definition about “Gluttony”,and tell us the result if we do that.So I think it is one of the posts I can learn.
Tony, 志永
Topic:Selfish will become misguide
ReplyDeleteThere are many sins in workplace. One of the most severe sin that maybe sets other colleagues off is being selfish. A person who is selfish means that he has some information keeping in his mind and don't want to share with others. Maybe there is a important message that employer want to announce his employee, but someone stop the message delivery. Selfish also can refer to somebody that is too cocky to do anything he wants and don't care others felling. Avoiding this sin, we can do anything not only always for ourself and think twice before we make decisions. That can makes us to nail in interpersonal relationship.
Christina 吳宛霖
Selfish
ReplyDeleteSelfish is a big sin in workplace. Why I say that? Because if someone just thinks about his/her benefit all the time doesn’t care about others, or just do his/her works doesn’t help others, do you want to make friend or colleague with him/her? I think the answer is “NO!” because the kind of people is selfish. They always live in their own world and don’t think about cooperation. But everything has been finished by a lot of people’s contribution, not just only in one person. No matter your status is boss or staff, you should think more for others, only that can help you accomplish work quickly and perfectly. Besides you can get more benefits than you are selfish.
Cindy,宋芳儒
A comment to Howard
ReplyDeleteAfter I read the message from Howard, I have the same thinking with him. In most work place, the work is mostly belongs teamwork. So when we have some different or opposite suggestion from other,we have to discuss peacely to solve this kind of problem. This is a common thing of interaction between people. If we can use the normal mind to face these accident instead of getting angry, we can nail the success of interaction with people.
I have comment for Yuki:
ReplyDeleteI think her short essay wrote well to learn. Because she told us that the disadvantage of selfish clearly and she also used the textual relation of “statement”. When I read her article, I can realize that selfish really is a sin in work place, so I do avoid being selfish men.
Cindy,宋芳儒
Gluttony
ReplyDeleteGluttony means someone eat too much and he can't afford it. So, if we talk about gluttony in workplace, it often represent someone achieve his goal too quickly, but he has not ready for it .Sometimes, we can see some people move up their job, but they have not build up their relationship with their co-workers,or they don't have enough professional techknowledge. Finally, they lose their job. Therefore, we had better to learn more professional ability to get ready for any challenge we might face. There is not any shortcut to the achievement. Only step by step in our workplace , and get more experience with our job. And we'll achieve our goal at the end.
I have a comment for Christina .I really accept your opinion .In realife, there really are many selfish people in any place .And most of they will destory the harmonious between parterners. However , Most importantly is how do we relate to variable kinds of people and let the team can achieve their goal peacefully.I think that is the thing we must learn before we go into the workplace.
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ReplyDeleteLust
ReplyDeleteLust is the one of deadly workplace sins. It means people who spend more time focusing on other’s work achievements rather than their own work. In the workplace, achievements may help someone to be promoted. Promotion represents not only the higher salary but also the affirmative of ability. But there is no shortcut to the credits. People who want to be promoted quickly may always loss the wit. They may snatch the credits from other colleagues and peers or do something bad to them in the workplace. Maybe they can be promoted by the methods which are mentioned above, but they loss their colleagues help and belief simultaneously. It’s really detrimental to their job.
Chris,趙中譽
I’d like to leave a comment to Peter.
ReplyDeleteAccording to your post, sound like the emotional management is very important in the workplace. People who may lose or get a job depend on their ability of emotional management. The context explained the importance of emotional management well. But I think you can provide some examples about how to improve it. That will be better.
Chris,趙中譽
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ReplyDeleteLaziness
ReplyDeleteIn workplace, you shouldn’t show laziness. While you are in a lazy attitude, it means you don’t want to work or make any effort to do anything. You may being dilatory in doing things, or even you just waste your time doing nothing but just hanging around there. That’s a bad thing in work. When you don’t concentrate doing your job, it can sink the morale lower not only yourself but everyone colleague you work with. I think that will totally make sense if you get fired. So, laziness is really a bad sin that everyone should avoid it.
Fay, 謝欣蕙
Gluttony
ReplyDeleteGluttony is urgent to reach a goal or an achievement. You rob all credit but don’t share with peers or others who ever help you. For example your boss gives you a case. And you achieve this case with your group. But you talk your boss this case complete by yourself. Maybe this way is a shortcut to promotion. But you will deteriorate more things such as your peer’s trust and bad relationship. Even everybody wants not to help you in your workplace. Therefore gluttony is dettiment should be avoided in your workplace.
Jeff 張競元
Leave a comment to Maggy.
ReplyDeleteI think your opening line is very clear. It shows your command directly and you also tell us how to control our emotion. Listing the consequences of losing temper is also backing your point up. I think you use the pattern “cause and effect” appropriately. I think you could add some tips in controlling sentiment. It will make your essay more interesting.
Fay, 謝欣蕙
A comment to Jamie
ReplyDeleteYour post textual relationships use general-example. And first sentence correlate with last sentence. But maybe you can write some details for laziness. Explaining why laziness is a sin in your workplace. I think your essay is fluent
Jeff 張競元
Don't anger in workplace.
ReplyDeleteArguement happens when discussing something with others. Everyone wants their opinions to be accepted. But usually there can be only one choice. So,they begin to dispute. Finally,the most angry and loudest one wins this battle. Then their reletionship gets broken. Others obey because of being submitted. So they do things in a bad mood. Still,the work appears bad and maybe uncompleted. So,never be angry in workplace.
Tobey,莊俊宏